With a couple of companies founded, executed and been through sales deals, I know the different purposes that business plans are meant for. Right from academic purposes to actual executional merits of a business plan need to be understood before making one.
I would not only suggest edits, but also propose and write on your behalf ( with prior intimations) the content, that will make your project complete.
Please write back if you need more data. I will look forward to your response.